Lady of Fire

this was good. it was a bit short but it was interesting. however, i would suggest that you split it into more paragraghs, it will make it much easier on ...

ok, i fixed the candy thing. i hope this is better.

Ok, chapter 1 has been rewritten and Chapter 2 is up. Just for an update.

ok, Chapter 2 is now up. Just for the update.

Thanks for all of the ideas you gave me. As you already know, i have rewritten chapter one and i would like to ask you for some help. She had ...

As I reread the chapter, I did realize that my sentences were a little lengthy. So I will need to work on that. Also, I felt I needed to included ...

Thank you all for reviewing this chapter. Before I put up chapter 2, i'm going to edit this chapter. If you all could read it and tell me what I ...

this was so good. you really create a great mental picture and you can really understand Tera's emotions and fears. i cant wait for the next chapter.

thank you. I'm always bad with punctuation, but your kind words make me fell like i have accomplished something.

this is really good. a few unnatural sentences but besides that, it really drew me in. i can't wait to read more.

this is really good. you can feel the emotion threw your writing. it blew me away.

this was really good. i don't think you should change it. but, quick question, how could you be sitting then walking?